Tuesday, December 28, 2010

SHOP GIRL

every night
walking along cold streets
then turning a corner
i'd see her
she sat black and white
in the shadows of a window
sometimes she didn't
mount the frame until i
walked by, other times
she waited staring with
moon eyes glinting
silver streaks through
the glass watching me
watching her
she often lifted her
leg putting a
toe to her mouth to show
her lean flexibility
once she let her tongue show
as she rubbed her sinuous
body along the glass
tempting me with her
confidence and sexuality
and then like the good
worker she was
she curled herself up
pretending sleep
and listening for
mice.

12 comments:

  1. Ha! Excellent set up and twist at the end. Well written piece.

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  2. excellent writing
    ..she sat black and white...wow
    amazing ending also - i agree with adam - a well written piece

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  3. you had me at 'every night' :-) Nicely done.

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  4. hehe...yeah i was going a total other direction...nicely done...

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  5. Oh lovely... the ever-feminine wiles of the feline... A wonderfully voluptuous poem.

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  6. Excellent One Shot of feline fantasy.

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  7. Gorgeous writing - you tricked me and I loved it :) delightful portrait of a cat

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  8. What a captivating read....a wonderful one shot!
    :-)

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  9. Thanks everyone. Haven't had much time to write or read during the holidays. Working long hours and beat when I get home. New Year's resolution..read more of others' work.

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  10. I couldn't believe how many things ran through my mind with your solid imagery. Never saw the ending coming. Loved it! Great job!

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  11. Nothing I like better than a write witha witty twist..
    Well done!!

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  12. Love the last four lines of this. :)

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