Sunday, November 28, 2010

YAR

luscious
in stripes
blue curacao
eyes
balanced
over a
maraschino
cherry
mouth
she lists
starboard
her curves
sail the
art deco
bar stool


my heart
drops
anchor

22 comments:

  1. Thanks. Glad to know the ending worked. Wanted that reassurance.

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  2. I think I can see her. Great metaphor and image.

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  3. You capture well a feeling of awe, and for good reason. Excellent poem and use of short lines.

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  4. What an excellent Bogey voice-over!!

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  5. Sounds like a beauty - one of those moments, caught up in the stunning wonder of the image. Nice piece!

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  6. Classic tale told with no single unnecessary word. Wish that was one of my talents, but I enjoy it all the more in others. I love that image of her curves, sailing as she lists...

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  7. This is a great read, Love the last stanza. Love and Light, Sender

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  8. Sleek poem. Beautiful playing with words here.

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  9. Excellent, it read like slow-motion in a romance scene! ~April :)

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  10. Ooh, I really loved this. Very evocative, art and poetry mix in your words. It is my first time here and this one hooked me enough to make me want to explore further.

    Good stuff!

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  11. The first thing that popped into my mind when I came to your blog was Billy Collin's "Nightclub"It must be the picture.

    I love this poem and poems like this that use few words to say big things.

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  12. Thanks for coming by and reading. Appreciate what you're saying and that you liked this piece, everyone. I should have noted the picture background but didn't find a place to do it.
    This is Edward Hopper's Nighthawks, painted in 1942. It hangs in the Chicago Art Institute. Took my blog name from the painting. I'm a night guy and thought it suited.

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  13. Bravo! Very sensual, fabulous imagery...really like the way you laid and played it!

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  14. Such vivid imagery -- very beautiful. A pleasure to read!

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  15. Oh yea.. first impressions matter! Those kilelr looks are bound to ..well.. kill! :)
    Very well expressed here!!

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  16. Ahhh! I smiled reading it.. so perfect... Interesting...

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

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  17. Glad she found some admirers. Thank you everyone.

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  18. Nice background picture..noted the source. Kinda goes with your poems. This one's a delicious read.

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  19. Love this piece. Rapid-firing. Thank you for sharing

    Regards
    Maureen
    http://wwworphanstones.blogspot.com

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